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March 23, 2020
Professor Ysamur Flores-pena
Field trip to the museum of tolerance
In our modern society now, we lived under a joyful, peaceful world, words like war, kill,
plunder sounds far from our life. But do you know that back to 18 centuries, there were people
age like us who been killed group by group because their race, and this event were really
happens in the history called the “the holocaust”. Today our class bring us to the museum of
tolerance to knowledge one of the most brutality crime of the Jewish holocaust during world war
II by the Nazis.
Before we start with the holocaust I want to talk about the initiator of evil – Adolf Hitler.
Hitler was chancellor of Germany from 1933 to 1945, serving as dictator and leader of the Nazi
Party, or National Socialist German Workers Party, for the bulk of his time in power. Hitler’s
fascist policies precipitated World War II and led to the genocide known as the Holocaust, which
resulted in the deaths of some six million Jews and another five million noncombatants.[ A&E
He joined the World war I and later his ambition motived him to Munich
and continued to work for the German military. As an intelligence officer, he monitored the
activities of the German Workers’ Party- DAP and adopted many of the anti-Semitic, nationalist
and anti-Marxist ideas of party founder Anton Drexler. In September 1919, Hitler joined the
DAP, which changed its name to the- Nationalsozialistische Deutsche Arbeiterpartei (NSDAP)
often abbreviated to Nazi. Hitler personally designed the Nazi party banner, appropriating the
swastika symbol and placing it in a white circle on a red background. He soon gained notoriety
for his vitriolic speeches against the Treaty of Versailles, rival politicians, Marxists and Jews. In
1921, Hitler replaced Drexler as the Nazi party chairman. In our current generation most time we
known this man from the movie, article, game entertainment and etc. There are not many historic
resources of him like what present in museum of tolerance, and after the tour in museum of
tolerance we acknowledge that Jewish is not the only race he been aim at.
But what is his motivation of this? why Hitler is such a racism man? According to
holocaust encyclopedia, for years before Adolf Hitler became chancellor of Germany, he was
obsessed with ideas about race. In his speeches and writings, Hitler spread his beliefs in racial
“purity” and in the superiority of the “Germanic race”—what he called an Aryan master race.
[ holocaust encyclopedia] He pronounced that his race must remain pure in order to one day take
over the world. For Hitler, the ideal “Aryan” was blond, blue-eyed, and tall. When Hitler and the
Nazis came to power, these beliefs became the government ideology also known as propaganda
and were spread in publicly displayed posters, on the radio, in movies, in classrooms, and in
newspapers. The Nazis began to put their propaganda into practice with the support of German
scientists who believed that the human race could be improved by limiting the reproduction of
people considered “inferior. Beginning in 1933, German physicians could perform forced
sterilizations, operations making it impossible for the victims to have children. Among the
targets of this public program were Roma (Gypsies), an ethnic minority numbering about 30,000
in Germany, and handicapped individuals, including the mentally ill and people born deaf and
blind. Also victimized were about 500 African-German children, the offspring of German
mothers and African colonial soldiers in the Allied armies that occupied the German Rhineland
region after World War I. [ holocaust encyclopedia] But why do Hitler hate Jewish so much?
According to the census of June 1933, the Jewish population of Germany consisted of about
500,000 people. Jews represented less than one percent of the total German population of about
67 million people. Eighty percent of the Jews in Germany about 400,000 people have German
citizenship. The remainder were mostly Jews of Polish citizenship, many of whom were born in
Germany and who had permanent resident status in Germany. After all, about 70 percent of the
Jews in Germany lived in urban areas. [ holocaust encyclopedia] And at that point Jews in
Europe had been victims of discrimination since the Middle Ages, mostly are religious reasons.
Christians saw the Jewish faith as an abnormal that are not purity. Jews were sometimes forced
to convert, or they were not allowed to practice certain professions. In the 19 century, religion
played a less important role. It was replaced by theories about the differences between races and
peoples. The idea that Jews belonged to different people than the Germans, for instance, Even
Jews who had converted to Christianity were still different because of their bloodline. Hitler
blamed the Jews for everything that was wrong with the world. Germany was weak and in
decline due to the Jewish influence. According to Hitler, the Jews were after world dominance.
And they would use anything to achieve their goals, including capitalism. In this way, Hitler took
advantage of the existing prejudice that linked the Jews to monetary power and financial gain.
He held that communism was a Jewish conspiracy, as most of the communist leaders were
Jewish. only a small proportion of the Jews were communists. This idea of Jewish communism
was to have awful repercussions in the war with the Soviet Union that started in 1941. After
many conspiracy from Jewish, Hitler start the massacre on Jewish and as known as the holocaust,
but still there were so many answers of why Hitler massacre the Jewish, such as the Jewish took
the most job opportunity from the Germanies or there were a prophesy of one day Jewish will
lead the world, most of all we know that Hitler was a crazy racism man and he didn’t only put
hatred on Jewish also anyone who he think is not purify as he think, such as homosexual and the
After acknowledging the crime in the museum, the commentator also introduces the
“Final solution’’ to us, what is clear is that the genocide of the Jews was the culmination of a
decade of Nazi policy, under the rule of Adolf Hitler. The “Final Solution” was implemented in
stages. After the Nazi party rise to power, state-enforced racism resulted in anti-Jewish
legislation, boycotts, “Aryanization,” and finally the “Night of Broken Glass” pogrom, all of
which aimed to remove the Jews from German society. After the beginning of World War II,
anti-Jewish policy evolved into a comprehensive plan to concentrate and eventually annihilate
European Jewry. [ holocaust encyclopedia] After the Wannsee Conference in January 1942, the
Nazis began the systematic deportation of Jews from all over Europe to six extermination camps
established in former Polish territory — Chelmno , Belzec, Sobibor, Treblinka,
Auschwitz-Birkenau, and Majdanek. Extermination camps were killing centers designed to carry
out genocide. About three million Jews were gassed in extermination camps. consisted of
gassings, shootings, random acts of terror, disease, and starvation that accounted for the deaths of
about six million Jews, two-thirds of European Jewry.
This entire event should be unforgettable, not only in the history but also peoples mind.
And that’s why the museum of tolerance is a remarkable museum that everyone should go, in the
museum it used the artist way to shows people of the crimes that Nazis did, and many place the
viewer could interaction with, which made me felt the history so realism that I can’t even believe
it. The museum presented many true histories, it used the prejudice from people than using it to
telling people of how prejudice and racism could destroy peoples mind and make each other hate
each other. I still remember we were sitting in a restaurant, and there were two black people had
a fight with three white people, at the end the gun shot accidentally murdered a ladies life, it
looks like a small fight in our life but at the end its became a tremendous thing that killed
someone, and all start with peoples racism and prejudice. And we went to an underground prison,
the wall is cold and heavy, the prison is old and dark, imaging people were locked down here day
by day, year by year, but other people such as Nazis were plunder and kills out there, and most of
all this thing is real, it’s really happened back then, every time when I think about this my heart
start shaking, not only angry of what they did to them also be grateful of the peaceful in the
After the tourist in museum of tolerance I want to thank for my professor for this
experiment, and the explain from the museum. Before I never thought this holocaust is such a big
deal in the history, and mainly I never thought that a man’s prejudice could become a weapon
took others life, as an international learner I know that the war mighty be over centuries ago but
the prejudice between human is never going to stop, but I know I will stop that by looking at the
biography in the museum corridor, I will stop the prejudice between people and make their death
remarkable. As a designer I know that my creation should not only bring ideology to each other
also make people treated this impotently, and for our world now, prejudice is happened everyday
maybe around us maybe in some where in the world, just like recently the covid-19 virus, media,
newspaper, they all start to blame other counties for this virus but they never tried to unit people
together and fight this thing together, for country we may from different race and bloodline but
overall, we are humans, and we are all the same.
Writing Model 2
The Value of a College Degree
The rapidly rising cost of higher education is causing
many to question the value of continuing education
beyond high school. Many wonder whether the high
cost of tuition, the cost of choosing college over full-time
employment, and the accumulation of thousands of
dollars of debt is, in the long run, worth the investment.
The risk is especially large for low-income families
who have a difficult time making ends meet without the
additional burden of college tuition and fees.
In order to determine whether higher education is worth the investment, it is
useful to examine what is known about the value of higher education and the rates
of return on investment to both the individual and to society.
There is considerable support for the argument that the return on investment in
higher education is high enough to justify the high cost of pursuing a college degree.
Though the difference in earnings between college and high school graduates varies
over time, college graduates, on average, earn more than high school graduates.
According to the Census Bureau, over an adult’s working life, high school graduates
earn an average of $1.2 million; associate’s degree holders earn about $1.6 million:
and those with a bachelor’s degree earn about $2.1 million (Day and Newburger,
2002). These statistics support the contention that, though the cost of higher
education is significant, a college graduate’s return on investment in his or her
education is high enough to justify the cost.
While it is clear that investment in a college degree, especially for those students
in the lowest income brackets, is a financial burden, the long-term benefits to
individuals, as well as to society at large, appear to far outweigh the costs.
Source: Adapted from Porter, Kathleen. “The Value of a College Degree.”
Questions about the Model
1. What is the purpose of Paragraph 1? How does it relate to Paragrap?
2. Which sentence in Paragraph 3 makes the central claim of the argument? What
information supports this claim?
3. What conclusion does the argument draw?
4. Where do arguments against Kathleen Porter’s position appear in her report?
Noticing Vocabulary: Synonyms, 2
As you know, writers broaden their vocabulary through reading. When they encounter
a new word, they may look it up in a dictionary. Other times, however, they can
determine the meaning of a word from the context of the sentence in which it appears.
150 CHAPTER 8
sides of an issue is examined in a single paragraph. You rebut the opposing claim and
In an essay that is organized in a point-by-point pattern, each key idea from both
provide support for your argument.
The first paragraph frames the issue, explains the controversy surrounding the
topic, and states your position on the issue (thesis).
in each paragraph of the body, you state a claim from the opposing side, then rebut
with a claim from your argument.
Paragraph 2: statement of the other side’s first counterargument and
Paragraph 3: statement of the other side’s second counterargument and
Paragraph 4: statement of the other side’s third counterargument and your
The final paragraph restates your viewpoint and includes a summary of your
argument. It also often includes a call to action.
Of course, these diagrams present a slightly simplified and theoretical version of
argumentative essays. An essay may not follow these patterns exactly. For example, the
body paragraphs may reverse the point-to-point pattern: stating the writer’s argument,
followed by a counterargument, and then the rebuttal.
You can use whichever organizational patterns you wish, but it may be helpful to keep
these two points in mind as you decide:
• Block organization, because of its divided approach (one side,
then the other), works well for short papers and issues that are
not very complex.
Point-by point organization, which allows the writer to examine
issues in depth, is better suited for complex issues and longer
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PLANNING YOUR ARGUMENT
Framing the argument is partly based on anticipating the responses of your audience.
Some readers will easily agree with your claims. Others will demand more evidence
than you have provided. Still others will disagree with your claims and offer
counterarguments. Anticipating the attitude of your audience
, and the arguments they
might make, are essential steps in the writing process.
KNOWING YOUR AUDIENCE
Your readers can be classified into three general categories: supportive, neutral, and
The Supportive Audience
These readers are already familiar with the issue and tend to agree
They are looking for additional reasons to support this position, especially if you can
rebut the opposing arguments. Because they are receptive to what you have to say, you
need not provide a great many facts, statistics, or examples—but you should provide
some support for your claims.
The Neutral Audience
These readers may be interested in the issue, but have not formed strong opinions
about it. They are most likely to accept your claims if you support them well and do
not use overly emotional language, which would likely make them suspicious of your
fairness and objectivity.
The Antagonistic Audience
These readers strongly disagree with your position. Your best approach with such
readers is to strongly support your claims with facts, statistics, and examples
avoid any emotionally charged language. Present yourself as a reasonable and logical
person so they have less reason to dismiss your arguments.
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